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It was a cold, blustery winter morning, the day of new years,
That I found myself outside my home, taking a walk with my fears,
All alone and wrapped tight with nowhere to go,
I simply trudged on, out there in the snow.

Something was troubling me, something I could not understand,
It was nothing but a feeling that made me wander the land.
I just needed to know what, as I followed a path to guide my way,
There was nothing as of yet, though somehow I knew I only had one day,
One day to find hope in this world, to find even a small spark,
And this I was thinking, as I entered the park.

All wrapped up in my thoughts,
I continued to wearily wander the wood,
When suddenly I heard a shout from somewhere ahead.
I stopped and looked up,
and within me my heart filled with dread.

Ahead of me, there was a cliff overlooking a pool dark and deep,
And upon that cliff, there stood a girl, dressed in a veil,
She didn’t move as she stared back at me,
She was so small,
So sad, and frail,
And suddenly I knew.

Breaking into a run, towards this high ledge,
I had to reach her in time,
For somehow I knew, deep down inside,
That it was not just her life, but mine as well on the line.

At the base of the cliff, I looked up in dismay,
The summit was so high up, and I was so far away,

But I could not afford to be daunted so easily,
And I set my foot in the first hold.
No risk was too great,
It was time to be bold.

I climbed with my heart beating like a drum, keeping time,
As I struggled to reach the top of the steep incline,
Every inch hard won, every foot a victory all its own,
I stubbornly fought my way up that outcropping of stone.

Until at last,
I reached the top, and hauled myself over the edge,
Just in time to see her fall, and plummet down from that high ledge.

I swore and leapt forward, and I managed to grasp her hand,
She looked back up at me wanly,
And shook her head slowly when I tried in vain to stand,

Saying: "There's nothing that can save me from that dark pool of depression,
No bond strong enough, so let this be a lesson.
Sometimes you have to accept that you cannot climb the wall."

With those last words, she let go of my hand.
I wept as I watched her fall.
She broke through the ice, and disappeared from sight.

I looked up through my tears,
And saw the sun going down,
It was getting close to night.
Now was the time,
I could not let her drown.


I took the plunge.


The fall, so brief, was terrifying on its own,
But then came the freezing cold of the black abyss,
I had no time to come back up for air,
The ice had closed over me, and in my heart, I knew something was amiss.

With my exit sealed, and trapping me here,
I felt the terrible darkness begin to close in.
For a moment, I began to panic, my air was already running thin…

Then somewhere in the darkness, I heard a soft whimper,
And within me, my resolve was steeled,
"Don't give up!" I cried out,
And began to push downward,
My hope had become my shield.

As I pushed my way deeper into the pool,
The darkness retreated from my gaze.
And I could feel my strength gaining,
As I peered into the haze.

There, at the bottom, I could see her curled up in a little ball,
And all around her, there was darkness, trapping her in its thrall.
I continued to claw my way down, inch by inch, I was straining!

Until I entered the darkness,
And then my hope started waning.
Somehow, I was slower, and my mind began to drone,
Until at last, my vestiges drained,
I began to sink like a stone.

Then I saw the fear in her eyes,
The fear of being alone.

A ray of light shone within me,
A single, small ray of hope,
Suddenly the darkness recoiled from us,
And I was loosed from my bindings of rope.

Grabbing her hand, I pushed off from the bottom,
And tried to carry us both beyond the void,
But the shadows returned, and tried to drag us both back,
And for a moment, all hope seemed destroyed.

In desperation I looked up, and saw the surface near,
The single ray of hope shining down from above,
The light reached down, till it shone upon us,
Beckoning with its promise of warmth and love.

Within me, my resolve returned, and I looked down to see,
Her eyes open, and staring up at me,
Finally, she nodded, and began to struggle upward as well,
And together we fought to be free from this horrid, dark, hell.
Suddenly the water surged upward, and we rode upon the swell.

As we continued upward, the darkness retreated,
And once more we could see the light,
The surface so clear, and drawing so near,
My heart rejoiced at the sight,
A few moments more, and we would be free from this realm of night.

Until at last, we broke the surface, and crawled upon the soft, sandy beach,
It was winter no longer, and the sun shone clear and high,
Small, fluffy white clouds dotted an endless blue sky,
And we were free at last.

My mission accomplished, and my hope in my own life restored,
I looked over next to me, at the girl who was now in my ward,
I knew I would protect her, from darkness and danger,
And never would I ask for reward,
For the knowledge that she was safe and sound,
And warm and free at last,
Was enough to make my spirit soar.

Edit: After taking a two month break, I took a step back and read this again with a fresh mind. I changed it to flow better, and rhyme more consistently.

I wrote this poem for a dear friend, who was going through a difficult time. I have been down the dark path, and I learned that you cannot make it alone. You need to rely on the people who care about you, because without them, you are stumbling alone in the dark, but when you have them around you, they will be there to catch you when you stumble, and they will carry a candle to light the path so you can see. Without them, you will get lost and you won't be able to find the path. I want her to know that I will always be there to catch her when she falls. I may have only known her for a short while, but she is my friend, and I am hers. And that's enough of a reason for me to go to the end of the earth and back again if it will help her find her way.

This poem was written by me.

If you wish to use it, please ask me first.

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bittersweet-ink Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
heartwarming! my only critique is the character of the little girl. someone who committed suicide would not so quickly want to save her own life after being successful, and would most likely not be grateful for being saved. otherwise, lovely writing ~
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Zel-the-Wolf Featured By Owner Mar 29, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Actually, she did not commit suicide. The dark pool was symbolic of depression, not death.
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Haunted-Broken-Lost Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014
;.; so beautiful 
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Zel-the-Wolf Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you!
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KaileeMaylene Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is beautiful, Zel! ;w; It was about to make me tear up... And it takes a lot for my emotions to be that tearful (As in about to cry. xD) from literature. (Except for role plays. I bawl like a baby if one of my characters die. xDD) 

It actually made my heart race when I was reading it. I was like "oh no! What's going to happen to them? ono" as I scooted closer to my laptop's screen. That is one of the hardest and major writing techniques is to get someone in suspense and emotion. (Especially in poems. Some people may not know the big words that are written in a poem.) You, my friend, is very talented! Awesome job!
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Zel-the-Wolf Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Well thank you very much! I still feel like it is very rough and needs polishing though... If I only had the time, haha!
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KaileeMaylene Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
You're welcome! ^^

I know what you mean. xD But it is still good to read. ^^ Just take your time to think how to polish it. ^^
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danielqf Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014  Student Digital Artist
Wow Zel, this is just... awesome!
So beautiful :'3
Even I can't understand some things, I can see you're an amazing writer!
 
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Zel-the-Wolf Featured By Owner Feb 27, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Thank you so much! That really means a lot.
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danielqf Featured By Owner Feb 28, 2014  Student Digital Artist
Np Zel, you know it's true! :3
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